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They managed to enter the next room without anyone melting into the floor. Sometimes it takes a drastic lesson to learn. Seeing someone melt like pizza is a very unforgettable lesson.

"Where are we now?" Anyone could have said that. No one cared.

Mendy had already made her way to the center of the empty room. It was just as big as the two before and it echoed when spoken into it.

"Mendy, Mendy, Mendy," it echoed through the room. Jack tried again to get her attention but she didn't turn, instead she walked to the end of the room and examined the walls.

"That girl is going to get us killed," George said out loud and the boy who screamed in the first room starting laughing. His name was Paul. There was something about Paul that seemed . . . odd. It was like he was so much more different than everyone else.

He sat on the floor laughing and when he finally stopped, the room was noticeably quiet and everyone stared at him. The boy just stared off towards Mendy while the rest of the people in the room had nothing to say or do, after all the room was empty.

Marina tried to carry a conversation with a frightened boy named Sawyer. His body shook and he could barely stand. "Don't worry, I think if we work together we can get out of this together," Marina said as she placed her hands on his shoulders.

George had walked off a bit so that everyone could see him. "Looks like we're in a giant puzzle with traps. I say we work together and try to get out of this alive."

"This room looks the same as the others. For all we know there is no way out," the girl wore glasses over her pale skin she introduced herself as Brandi in the first room.

Jack was the first to respond, "If they wanted us dead, they could have easily not given us a solution to the last room."

"Unless they want to watch us squirm. Or jump. Or run and watch us on their little cameras. This place is probably full of them and we're just pawns in a disgusting game of chess," Paul spewed out of his lips. He pushed himself off the ground with his wet palms.

George replied back not seeing the sweat that jumped from Paul's hand, "I don't care what you think. I'm going to survive this,” and he spun back to where Mendy sat. "Mendy? Did you find anything?"

"Yep!" she yelled back.

"What is it?"

"Why should I tell you? For all I know you put us in here," Mendy said. And then corruption spread. Their minds floated with horrible thoughts. Who could be involved? Why would someone want them here and could one of them really be the person who put them in here?

"You!" She had introduced herself as Katrina but many had already forgotten. There were two other girls with quite similar names and that had led to a secret confusion no had spoke about yet. Her voice was demanding, frightened almost.

Paul looked back at her and was about to take a step but he had felt his foot pull out of a puddle.

"Water?" Katrina said. The whole floor was now covered in an inch of water.

Mendy laid on her back in the center of the room while everyone else began to panic.

"What's going on?" someone asked.

"I can't swim," someone else said in a voice that wasn't their own.
 
George pushed through the water, which was up to the top of their ankles. "Mendy! What did you find out?" he asked upset over the new obstacle.

"I'm not telling you anything," she said and then the doors opened.

The water felt angry. Angry with them for disturbing its slumber deep within the bowels of the ancient monolith. It poured from above them, under them and none of it made any sense but the water level rose and now it rose fast like it was being drained from a large water reserve.

The group was pushed off their feet and into the watery mess. If this was in a safe environment, a water park would be the ideal situation, then this would have been fun. The screams were derived from fear not enjoyment.

"Help!" the boy's name was Steve, he couldn't swim.

"Help!" the others were trying to keep afloat themselves. I

t was a maniac struggle at first. One moment they were standing close to each other and now they were separated floating with waves in between their eyes. They couldn't tell who was threading water and those that were still underwater, drowning. Jack could see Mendy floating on her back rising with waves and then when he swam towards the center where Mendy floated, he felt a hand grab his foot.

Jack spun back and dove into the water where the calmness was untouched by the treacherous waves. Steve stared back swallowing mouthfuls of water as he tried to yell. Bubbles filled around Jack like an envelope. He tore through it and after the boy. Jack grabbed him by the waist and pulled him up but Steve had other plans to get to the top. He pulled Jack down by the shirt and tried to use that momentum to push himself upwards. In the process he had knocked all the air out of Jack and he tumbled into the dark belly of the flood.

There was this face. She was beautiful like sunflowers in a field bathe in the summer sun.

"Mom?"

"Baby boy, you are doing this for us, for your father and your sister," she told him.

He turned to see the welcoming faces that he had forgotten and then like a wave his memories came back.

"Come on, breathe," George said as he closed Jack's nose as he was about to breathe into his mouth. Water gushed out of his mouth like water out of whale's blowhole. He lied on the granite floor on the edge of death and he had this to yell, "One wish!"

***

"Steve, now explain to us why they let you compete for a chance for one wish. A wish that only 27 people get a chance to take twice a year."

"Well, I've got a couple of disabilities that normally would have kept me out of this line up. I can't swim, can't ride a bike, can't skate or even snap my fingers," Steve said smiling.

"Well . . . the important one was swimming. You are the first person chosen to enter without following every basic requirement," the announcer asked, "How do you feel about being specially chosen?"

"We'll ever since the monolith mysteriously appeared, a group of men and women had adopted me and I've been training ever since, figuring out mazes and puzzles."

"Right but it was the tricks and the magic that got you here," the announcer pressed on.

"Oh, the illusions! Yeah, they were the biggest puzzles of them all," he said as a puff of smoke hurried out of his hand. The crowd behind the steel barriers went mad with his tiny display of magical delight.

The boy walked away and joined the other candidates by the monolith, confident.

"That's Steve the Wonder, the youngest and most brilliant Illusionist, I just hope he doesn't have to swim."
Boom! The water chapter. One of my favorites. Surprisingly I wanted to save this one for later, but I couldn't help it.

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RyanTaylorGirl Featured By Owner Apr 3, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
You made me sound so wise with my first words spoken in the Monolith! Water's a great one
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LVeraWrites Featured By Owner Apr 4, 2013
:) more wise words are coming.
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RyanTaylorGirl Featured By Owner Apr 4, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
I'm excited!
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FishieGirl17 Featured By Owner Mar 26, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
This is awesome! :D Can't wait to read the next chapter!
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LVeraWrites Featured By Owner Apr 3, 2013
here it is. [link]
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FishieGirl17 Featured By Owner Apr 9, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Woooo! :D
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mendystar1 Featured By Owner Mar 26, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Nice chapter, I feel there needs to be a bigger tension of them turning on each other and not trusting each other. Overall, great chapter. Loving the flashbacks. :)

"It was just as big as the two before it and it echoed when spoken into it."
- 'it was just as big as the two before and it echoed when spoken into it.' ?
'Jack spun back and dove into the water were the calmness was untouched by the treacherous waves.'
- I don't think 'were' is the right word here. It sounds a bit odd.
""Help!" the boys name was Steve, he couldn't swim."
- I think it should be 'The boy's name...'
""Help!" the others were trying to keep afloat themselves."
- Should it be like this? "Help!" (newline?) The others were trying to keep..'
"and then when he swam towards the center where Mendy floated he felt a hand grab his foot."
- comma, 'where Mendy floated, he felt a hand..'
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LVeraWrites Featured By Owner Mar 26, 2013
all fixed. thanks again, you are the definition of awesomeness. :D
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mendystar1 Featured By Owner Mar 27, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
No problem Luis. Glad to help. :)
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hopeandlight4everas1 Featured By Owner Mar 26, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
I got to speak :D even if it was only two words, it's exciting ^^

Can't wait to see what happens next >v<
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LVeraWrites Featured By Owner Apr 3, 2013
heres the next one: [link]
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lime-tailes Featured By Owner Mar 25, 2013  Student General Artist
oh its a great chapter~!
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LVeraWrites Featured By Owner Apr 3, 2013
and heres the next one. [link]
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lime-tailes Featured By Owner Apr 3, 2013  Student General Artist
+rolls all over the place+ AH! thank you!
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EmperorKarino Featured By Owner Mar 25, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
typical survival situation where they turn on each other and people argue that they need to work together. good chapter. i like the character interactions. they seem pretty realistic considering the situation. usually when i work on my stories i always worry that the dialogue i have my characters do sounds all the same and there isn't clear differences between the personalities.
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EmperorKarino Featured By Owner Apr 3, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
yes, i know you posted chapter 4, i will get to it, i am just waiting for the perfect amount of free time so i can read the chapter all at once. should be this afternoon.
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