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The chasm could swallow you whole, take your house with it and spit it back into the air, as if it tasted like feces. The group had collected at the edge of a small platform as the door closed behind them, they stared deep into it’s throat and found only fear living there in the darkness.

Katie was the first to choke something out,"Why?"

It was a good question. It was honest and it had hung in the back of everyone's mind like a shattered mirror holding on to its last shard. "Why?"

Jack wanted to answer. Unlike the others he knew why they were here. He knew about the wars that had laid waste to other countries and the retaliation that had left only smaller nations what remained of the earth's resources. He knew the sound of greed, like explosions on a kids television. He smelled fear, tasted war and realized that they all had. Instead he chunked the shoe that was left behind into the gorge and they all listened - it never made a sound. The bottom was far and deep and if anyone fell they would surely die or falling endlessly

Mendy didn't care. Her goal was to move forward and get through this mess, and that awareness had brought the first rope to her hands.

"Mendy, I don't think," but George was too late. Mendy had swung forward into the air and towards the next rope until she grabbed it. Everyone watched in amazement as she swung with great skill. She followed the windy path of ropes that hung, down one row then onto the next, she swung back and forth until she reached the snake like end, she gripped tightly and then let go. Her body swung in as precise as a dart. She landed on a platform similar to the ones the others stood on.

The whole routine took her 5 minutes but the scream from her mouth lasted almost twice as long. Jack asked, concerned even though he knew he was too far be of any use, "What's wrong?"

"My arms," she gripped them, massaging her triceps with one arm and holding her shoulder with the other.

George's eyes fell to the ground, he sighed and whispered, "Her arms are tired from the last room. That wall . . . That damn wall  . . . I'm going to kill that guy." His voice rose as he vowed to kill Paul the boy who ran ahead and had either died here in the void between the two paths or had already moved on. Paul didn't spend any of his energy pulling the wall open, but everyone knew George did. George’s muscles were torn, used up and the pain still remained.

"I don't think I can do this," George said.

Marina had let go of Jack's hand. She didn't even realize she was holding on until she needed to let go. "George, we'll just go first," she said and she grabbed the first rope and pulled it towards the platform. The rope was thick, white, made with synthetic threads. It was man made for sure. No one felt comfort in that idea but they all held it in their head and as she tied a knot on the rope she held it out and placed her left foot on it.

Jack didn't want her to go first. He would have wanted anyone else to try but Marina was ready to risk her life, and as he caught her stare she pushed off. She took it slower than Mendy but achieved the same goal. Mendy reached out and grabbed the last rope and Mendy helped her off. The group went wild, as relief swept through their body.

"I'm next," and before Jack had seen who said it, the boy who called himself Raven, swung across and shortly after another boy had joined.

Jack knew that this would be an easy task for most them. He could envision them training in an open space under a circus like tent with acrobats and other men with various skills. He looked at Steve the boy who had almost killed him, and remembered the time the boy was being taught how to tight walk.

"Hold the bar closer to your body," the man's name was Harold. Any other memories of this instructor had escaped Jack. "Now relax." The boy refused and fell. It was Jack's turn and he held the balancing bar well. He paced himself, just like the instructor had asked and before he finished he saw the group of girls entering the large tent. He fell when he locked eyes with her.

He bounced in the netting and shuffled off near the girls. "Hi, my name is Jack," he said blushing but feeling extremely confident. "Hi”, she said and the girls around her giggled. They were the three Kats, and they stood around waiting to hear more - but nothing came. The instructor grabbed him by his arm and reminded him about why they were there.

"One wish," the voice whispered to him again. This dreadful arena is alive and he could hear its cold voice in his head and it caused him to turn where the girl, Katie had held on to one of the ropes and then she fell back into the abyss. The ledge was almost all emptied except for George and Jack who had waited for the others to get across and the sight had caused George to hurl whatever food he ate before they entered the monolith, down into the pit.

The other two, Katlyn and Katrina, yelled. The sound echoed and caused them all to cover their ears. Jack wanted to hear the sound of the girl's body slamming into the ground; but it didn't, just like the shoe.

"George, it's our turn," Jack said as he helped George with the first rope and he followed three ropes behind. The pain was evident and George wanted to scream but he held it in. Jack kept him calm. "You know George, I know who you are."

"Oh, Yeah?"

"A gymnist," Jack said.

"Really?"

"Nah, but it would be awesome if you were," and George's spirit rose and he managed through the pain until he swung into the crowd that awaited him. There was a lot of screaming in that room. Jack screamed as he thought his arms were about to pop out of their sockets but it was the touch of Marina's hand that felt magical. Pain disappeared; everything disappeared.

He remembered waving at her as he was dragged away, she had smiled and it made him happy.

"What are you trying to pull?" The boy had called himself Raven but Jack knew him as the boy whose his real name was Gabriel. Why would he lie about his name? Jack thought to himself.

***

"Katie! Katie!" the announcer yelled as the cameraman followed. "Katie, what do you think of the gymnastics training?"

"I don't think it's going to be useful," the girl said.

"Why's that? Don't you think there might be obstacles like this inside?"

"No, I don't. I think God brought this vessel down to find those who are worthy," she said holding her necklace with a large crucifix in her hand. "And I think I'm going to be the chosen one."
It's been a good week for me for literary wise. I got two stories win two contest and by win I mean they both got first place. The stories will then be put into a book which will be on Amazon in a couple of months. And I'll get a bigger royalty check. Check out my wordpress blog for more info: here

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noirraven Featured By Owner Apr 19, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Alright, here's some edits again :D

retaliation that had left only smaller nations left to control what was left of the earth's resources. <--I think this sentence would sound better like this "retaliation that had left only smaller nations to control what remained of the earth's resources. --- this way there is only 1 left in the sentence and it flows a little better, at least I think...

Instead the chunked the shoe that was left behind <-- Instead he chucked the shoe that left behind

The bottom was far and deep and if anyone fell, they would surely die or falling endlessly <-- The bottom was far and deep, if anyone fell they would surely die or fall endlessly.

She followed the windy path of ropes that hung <-- She followed the winding path of ropes that hung

Mendy reached out and grabbed the last rope and Mendy helped her off. The group went wild. <-- Mendy reached out and grabbed the last rope and helped her off. The group went wild with both relief and joy.

He could vision them training <-- He could envision them training

"You know George, I know who you are?" <-- This shouldn't be phrased as a question, it would be better if you ended it with a period or maybe a trail "..."

Hope that helps again :D
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LVeraWrites Featured By Owner Apr 24, 2013
it sure does help. Thanks a lot again. Btw, the next one's up and you make another appearance. :)
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noirraven Featured By Owner Apr 24, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Sweet, going to check it out :)
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LVeraWrites Featured By Owner Apr 2, 2016
Thanks. Guess what I finally put up something new. "The Alabastor Succubus" fav.me/d9xkd9m
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noirraven Featured By Owner Apr 18, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
WOO HOO!! Raven makes an appearance! :)
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lime-tailes Featured By Owner Apr 17, 2013  Student General Artist
so wonderful as ever~!
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LVeraWrites Featured By Owner Apr 17, 2013
Yay!
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lime-tailes Featured By Owner Jun 25, 2013  Student General Artist
:3 best story ever read
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LVeraWrites Featured By Owner Jul 10, 2013
it's up to chapter 11. hopefully 12 will come out today.
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lime-tailes Featured By Owner Jul 20, 2013  Student General Artist
I really look forward to it!
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LVeraWrites Featured By Owner Apr 2, 2016
Thanks. Guess what I finally put up something new. "The Alabastor Succubus" fav.me/d9xkd9m
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EmperorKarino Featured By Owner Apr 16, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
and they make it past the pit of death... :D
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LVeraWrites Featured By Owner Apr 17, 2013
almost everyone. :)
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EmperorKarino Featured By Owner Apr 17, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
well, it is a challenge isn't it? not everyone can be a winner.
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Writing-Apprentice Featured By Owner Apr 16, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
I really love this series. It's very interesting and well written.
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LVeraWrites Featured By Owner Apr 17, 2013
Thanks when it's done, i plan on re-writing it. Adding 3 characters back in and turning it into an ebook. And of course give it out free to everyone here with hopes that they leave a good review. :)
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Writing-Apprentice Featured By Owner Apr 19, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
You are such a greater writer, I wish I could write as well as you!
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LVeraWrites Featured By Owner Apr 23, 2013
Awwwww. I'm happy you think that because I dont think that at all. :)
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Writing-Apprentice Featured By Owner Apr 27, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
It's true. Especially since you have the remarkable ability to actually stick with writing what your writing. My brain kind of goes, "well I'm done writing that, let's write something else! OOOOH Squirrel!"
I don't even know where the squirrel came from.
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LVeraWrites Featured By Owner May 2, 2013
beileve me i have the same problem. im going to try to get another piece up today. I feel like ive been slacking but ive been crazy busy.
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Writing-Apprentice Featured By Owner May 3, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
It's fair enough when your busy. My brain just sits there when I'm bored like, "well, I could write that but here's something else that's interesting. Let's do that first" =)
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LVeraWrites Featured By Owner Apr 2, 2016
Thanks. Guess what I finally put up something new. "The Alabastor Succubus" fav.me/d9xkd9m
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