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The floor was firm and cold, the feeling had reminded them of a hospital examination table. Thoughts of pain, needles and death filled their minds. Then the smell swirled into their nostrils - urine and blood; it was if someone had emptied their diseased bladder here.

Jack was the first to awaken, lifting himself with both hands, turning and then, as he got on his knees, he stood among the bodies. He counted. "One, Two, Three . . ." his voice trailed off and when he turned around there was lovely tanned girl staring at him.

It had scared him; perhaps anything at the moment would have jolted him. "Hmph," he sucked in lots of air and his arms reached for his heart, clutching. She smiled back.

"Name's Mendy," her arm was stretched out in front of her. "What's yours?"

He was amazed that the first question he had heard was about who he was and not about where they were. "Jack, Jack Barrera," he then quickly shifted the question to something more important - Prioritize Jack he thought to himself - "Where are we?"

The question seemed to be the missing piece to everyone's broken puzzle. A puzzle that brought everyone back to life. Had he awakened the dead?

"Uhhh."

"Gragh," the roomed filled with twenty-five people awaking around the two.

His intuition was wrong about the floor - it was black granite. Hard, shiny black granite that made you feel like you were looking through a shiny swamp of death and their stood another version of you and that version looked like someone you didn’t recognize.

The newly awaken began to talk to each other with sadness and fear. "Well, Mendy, it looks like someone . . ." he said as he realized she had vanished.

"Hi, I'm Nina," a girl said to him. The room was alive with life. People got up and let their instincts take over. They began introducing themselves. It was either "Hi, my name is this" or "Where are we?" Jack had no idea where he was and he was sure that no one else knew either, but he wondered why that wasn’t yet a cause for concern.

"My name is Jack," he said and the names circled in his head.  

“William!”

“Tegan”

“Katie!”

“Kaitlyn!”

“Katrina. Hey! We got three Kat’s!”

“I’m Brandi!”

“Lexy.”

“Marina!”

“Connie!”

“Breenan!”

“My name’s Elizabeth. Please to meet . . . “

“Stephen. My name is Stephen.”

“I’m Martin.”

“Gloria.”

“Lawerence.”

“George. Hi!”

“Mendy!”

“Sarah!”

“Park!”

“Paul!”

“Sawyer.”

“Simone.”

“Jade.”

“Hi! My name is Robin, Robin . . . “

“Raven. My name is Raven!”

The room filled with an emptiness that smothered.

The room was large enough to fit a large whale comfortably, but as he began to think about a whale, he couldn't think of much of anything else. Who's my mother? Who's my father? Where was I born? the thoughts filled his head but nothing came out. He had holes in his memory. He had holes in his life.  

"Wait!" he yelled at the top of his lungs and it caused his throat to hurt. "Can anyone remember where they are from?" The murmurs shrank slightly until it was gone and then one large fellow near a dark corner, screamed. Then the tears replaced the noise and like hiccups, it caught on.

There it was – fear.

"Okay! Everybody calm down," George, skin dark, voice strong, was calm as he raised his arms into the air. "Let's just relax and share what information we have with each other. My name is George and . . . I can remember things . . . images, like animals, buildings and . . . math, history . . . Thomas Edison comes to my mind."

"Shut up, who the hell do you think you are anyways," the girl’s voice carried and it felt familiar like a commanding older sister, stout and brave. Her blonde hair flew back as she approached George. "Look around, we all look to be in our twenties," she said and everyone looked around at each other, "this is some kind of experiment or . . . I don't know . . . worse."

A girl stepped to the side of Jack and she introduced herself without breaking her stare at the two who seemed to now be arguing. "My name's Marina. You seem nice. Can I tell you something?"  

He turned and looked at her, his gaze drifted around her body. She was cute and thin, her hair was brown and youthful, her lips took him to a place, a field, where he could stare at them and kiss them - he was attracted to her and it made his heart race. "Yeah, tell me," he replied, swallowing out of sheer panic.  

"I'm scared."

"Me too," he replied looking back at the now three people fighting. The number of people who argued grew until George yelled at another who was stronger, larger than he was. That's when the obvious yet overlooked was spoken.  

"Look at us. We are all wearing some kind of elastic clothing under our clothes," the boy was right. Even though it may look like they were all wearing different clothes, they weren't. They wore the same shirt but a different color and the boys wore loose jeans with what one boy described as football underwear. The girls wore shorts and after some investigation, found out they wore they same kind of compression material underneath. The all wore sneakers and the same black compression material underneath their colored t-shirts. Jack pulled at his shirt and looked at its red color. He could also see the material underneath, it was comfortable and provided a broad range of motion underwear didn't provide. Someone had also mentioned it also absorbed sweat, a small tidbit that felt familiar and comforting.  

The most interesting piece of clothing was the bracelet. It was just a plain, rubber bracelet, no markings, no words. Jack's and Marina had the same color bracelet - red.  

Robin, the girl that interrupted George, had made it clear that she thought they were part of a project or experiment. "I'm pretty sure we are college students or . . ."

A man laughed. He laughed like she had said something so funny that it hurt his side. He even grabbed at it and lifted a finger to his eye. "I'm sorry, go on," he said laughing through the sentence, practicing gestures that were almost foreign.

Robin annoyed, glared deep at the man. Her eyes penetrated the awkwardness. "Stop," she paused between each word hoping to create a more defiant stand against his mad laughter, "laughing!" The crazy thing was he did stop which lead to complete and total silence and that's when the walls came to life.

The lights grew bright and a deep old voice shook the walls. "One wish," the voice had said and it imprinted into everyone's mind. They looked at each other trying to find the location of the voice, searching the blank walls and high ceiling, the bright lights that hung above but they found nothing. It came from the walls. The only one who knew this one fact, stood alone, away from the group and she tried to talk back to it through the same way it talked to all of them - through their minds. Mendy didn't get a response.

Two whole minutes passed before the voice had returned. "One wish brought you here and one wish will be your reward. Your first challenge awaits you behind the first door. There is no turning back now. Please proceed with caution," the voice etched their mind with pain and then . . . it was gone.  

Three things happened when the voice went away. The first was the crying. Fear created the downpour. The voice had appeared and created an icy shiver through many of the people that stood on that marble floor. Robin felt the same when her mother died earlier that year.

Robin blinked when the second thing appeared. It wasn't the way the door opened that had her frozen in a stupor, it was the idea that she remembered something about her life before she woke up in the monolith – a door, opening searing the edge of darkness with a light that was so bright, she shielded her eyes.

Marina stood close to Jack. Her hand brushed his and it created goose bumps up his arm. He smiled until he saw the last thing to happen in that moment. The ground began to glow orange like hot coals. "I think we need to leave this room," Jack said. A boy who sat in a dark corner lifted his hands from the ground and yelped at the heat.  

Jack knew that whomever walked through that door would die. He wasn't the only one with that same thought, it drifted around and they all saw it. Their eyes were frozen on the darkness that waited for them.


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"Tonight live coverage of The Monolith as we get the run down from every contestant following their training, their history and their dream of obtaining that one prize: One Wish!”
The long awaited first chapter. There may be some small issues/typos here and there. I re-wrote this one chapter so many times, it's almost completely different than the original draft and usually there is a tendency to mess things up. I hope you like it, afterall many of you are in the story. :)

Next: Chapter 2

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Shyanne-Kai Featured By Owner Apr 18, 2013
Awesome. I love stories like this, can't wait to get to know everyone and what secrets they might be holding!
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LVeraWrites Featured By Owner Apr 24, 2013
it's going to be a long one. so far seven chapters are out, i hope you enjoy them. :)
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mendystar1 Featured By Owner Mar 17, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
My sister's comments,
It's a bit weird how you introduce each of the characters, with them yelling out their names. Maybe it's because it's not common in most books, usually it has a background story or slowly integrating each character because it's overwhelming to have so many characters introduced to the reader at once. And you got two Lexys, is that supposed to happen?
I like the part when Robin remembers how her mom died, and it ends. It's like 'Ohmygod what the hell?' and something's going to happen. *evil laugh*, anxious, exhilaration and such.
I also like how you made 'Mendy' experimental? How she tries to talk back to the wall.
Overall, I like the idea. (She really likes it)
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LVeraWrites Featured By Owner Mar 18, 2013
thanks for the extra Lexy. i need to make sure i didnt meant o have another name in there. it is really hard to keep track of characters. And the list of people yelling was added last, but was always intentionally meant to be like that. Hopefully i can get the next chapter up today. :) Stay tuned.
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mendystar1 Featured By Owner Mar 18, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
No problem! My sister noticed that. ah yes, I've been waiting the entire day for it. I guess it'll be up tomorrow?
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LVeraWrites Featured By Owner Mar 18, 2013
Chapter 2. [link]
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lime-tailes Featured By Owner Mar 14, 2013  Student General Artist
mah~! Oh the joy of waiting~! +HAPPY+ I love the opening!
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LVeraWrites Featured By Owner Mar 15, 2013
thanks. Wait till people start dying. :D
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lime-tailes Featured By Owner Mar 18, 2013  Student General Artist
Yay death
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LVeraWrites Featured By Owner Mar 18, 2013
Chapter 2. [link]
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noirraven Featured By Owner Mar 13, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Awesome, little disappointed a was introduced last though... that usually means death first........... which totally sucks! But like anyways!
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LVeraWrites Featured By Owner Mar 18, 2013
Chapter 2. [link]
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LVeraWrites Featured By Owner Mar 15, 2013
Ha. Far from it. :) I dont want to give too much away, but you're an important character.
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Kjdragon Featured By Owner Mar 12, 2013  Student Digital Artist
wow very interesting keep it up. Wonder whats gonn happen next...actually wonder who they all were :?
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LVeraWrites Featured By Owner Mar 15, 2013
thanks. yeah, the little bits at the end will clear up a lot of the little holes. They get more intense later in the chapters.
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Kjdragon Featured By Owner Mar 15, 2013  Student Digital Artist
notify me:eager:
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LVeraWrites Featured By Owner Mar 18, 2013
Chapter 2. [link]
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Rowanelle Featured By Owner Mar 12, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Intriguing. Notify me when the next chapter comes up will you?
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LVeraWrites Featured By Owner Mar 12, 2013
Trying to do every monday. But eitherway i'll send you a comment. :)
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Rowanelle Featured By Owner Mar 14, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Thanks a lot
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LVeraWrites Featured By Owner Mar 18, 2013
Chapter 2. [link]
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Rowanelle Featured By Owner Mar 19, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Thanks
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mendystar1 Featured By Owner Mar 12, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Fantastic chapter. Worth the wait. (It was such a long wait but really worth it. It's been so long man.) Thanks for making me the second character that is introduced. (no really, I was so happy) I like your similes/metaphors (especially the one of hiccups, so good). And the last sentence, it just gets the reader excited for what's next. I'm so excited to read everyone's backstory and their history. My gosh. Fantastic job. As always.

Feedback/Suggestions(?)
"The floor was firm and cold, the feeling had reminded them of a hospital examination table. "
- I feel like this is can be either 2 sentences or you find a better way to put them together? It sounds very separate. (or have a ; in it)
"a shiny swamp od death and their stood another version of you"
- Spelled 'of' wrong and the wrong use of 'there'?.
""Yeah tell me," he replied, "
- Comma between 'Yeah' and 'tell me'?
"like they were all wearing different clothes they weren't"
- comma between 'clothes' and 'they weren't'?
"same way it talked to all of them - through their minds. Mendy didn't get a response."
- feel that 'Mendy didn't get a response' should be in the same paragraph as the previous one because I was a bit confused on who was talking to the walls until that sentence so.. (whatever you like)
"with a light that was so bright she shielded her eyes."
- comma between 'was so bright, she shielded her eyes'
"Her hand brushed his and he it created goose bumps"
- no need for 'he' in 'and it created'
"until George yelled at another who was bigger than he"
- 'bigger than he'? I've never heard that before. Seems a bit weird but understandable.
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LVeraWrites Featured By Owner Mar 12, 2013
Thanks. I knew I missed a lot of stuff but no one had mentioned anything. A lot was from tearing apart sentences and leaving small things behind, but im glad you caught them. :) Btw you are one of three main characters. You'll see. :)
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mendystar1 Featured By Owner Mar 12, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Yeah. I think some people are just scared to offend people or that they really didn't notice the mistakes. I know I didn't notice them until I read it the second time. ;)
Wait what? I'm one of the three main characters? Really? You just made my life and you made my Mondays more enjoyable. I can't wait to read the next one. :)
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SillyPanda95 Featured By Owner Mar 12, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Loved it!, Very interesting start!
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LVeraWrites Featured By Owner Mar 18, 2013
Chapter 2. [link]
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LVeraWrites Featured By Owner Mar 12, 2013
thanks. And no one's died yet. :)
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Puppy-41 Featured By Owner Mar 12, 2013
Wonderful! :) Can't wait for more
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LVeraWrites Featured By Owner Mar 18, 2013
Chapter 2. [link]
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Puppy-41 Featured By Owner Mar 19, 2013
Another beautiful piece :) Can't wait for chapter 3
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LVeraWrites Featured By Owner Mar 15, 2013
thanks. Next one should be up on Monday.
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iytj Featured By Owner Mar 11, 2013
so cool!!:clap:
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LVeraWrites Featured By Owner Mar 11, 2013
Please fav it if you like it. :)
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iytj Featured By Owner Mar 12, 2013
oh,i will!:nod:
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LVeraWrites Featured By Owner Mar 18, 2013
Chapter 2. [link]
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iytj Featured By Owner Mar 19, 2013
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excellent and eloquent work!
thank you for the link!:D
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hopeandlight4everas1 Featured By Owner Mar 11, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
I love this so much, can't wait for the next chapter >v<
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LVeraWrites Featured By Owner Mar 11, 2013
I would also love it if you faved it. :)
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hopeandlight4everas1 Featured By Owner Mar 11, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
I thought I had :iconsweatdropplz: Naughty internet tricking me
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LVeraWrites Featured By Owner Mar 18, 2013
Chapter 2. [link]
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LVeraWrites Featured By Owner Mar 11, 2013
Thanks. I just hope I can get the next piece ready. I really tore this one a part for two weeks before finally finding a bit of a break through today. :)
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hopeandlight4everas1 Featured By Owner Mar 11, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
I wish you luck then ^^
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LVeraWrites Featured By Owner Mar 11, 2013
you too. Afterall you are in the story. Mwhahahaha!
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hopeandlight4everas1 Featured By Owner Mar 11, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Yes, cannot wait to find out my fate :D
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LVeraWrites Featured By Owner Apr 2, 2016
Thanks. Guess what I finally put up something new. "The Alabastor Succubus" fav.me/d9xkd9m
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EmperorKarino Featured By Owner Mar 11, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
how interesting :)
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LVeraWrites Featured By Owner Mar 11, 2013
In a good way, I hope.
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EmperorKarino Featured By Owner Mar 11, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
of course, how can something be interesting in a bad way?
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