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Ryan had seen death enter through a person's eye. He had captured it many times in his paintings. There was George who was punched repeatedly until he died. There was a girl named Yasmine or could have been Jasmine. She died only after three days. Uncle John grew tired of her screaming and didn't want to waste capturing it on canvas, so he taped her up and cut her open from the bottom of her stomach up to the center of her breast while he raped her.
 
The closet held the shattered kids faces immortalized on a stretched linen that was first coated on gesso. 
 
Ryan ran as fast as his trembling feet could take him. He held the ring of keys in his hand and opened the cage. The girl pushed him aside and she ran for her life. Ryan tried to yell at the girl but the words weren't his. They belonged to a child who couldn't talk. He tried to spit the words out of his dry mouth but it sounded like someone who had swallowed his tongue. He slowly found himself crawling up the steps and into the kitchen where daylight had pressed through the open front door.
 
He regained his balance as he pulled himself up using a wooden chair by the kitchen table and hobbled into the bedroom where Sam lied. She had died crushed by the weight of a horrible man who raped his way to happiness. 
 
Ryan opened the closet door and there, his paintings of dead children hung. He walked into it with the strength he never knew he had, past the pictures of tortured souls. He could feel them staring at him, blaming him for their deaths. Their gagged mouths, their bleeding bodies and their tears all whispered the same blaming words.
 
At the end of the long walk-in closet was a picture frame. He had known it existed and thought countlessly about it's location. He just knew it had moved here and he was right.
 
He held it in his hands and stared at the picture of his mother and father, holding hands posing for the camera. They were visiting a theme park and Ryan looked so happy with a stuffed cat as big as his body and a large ICEE in his other hand. His face was stained with the red color of the drink's dye. His Uncle was with them. His thumb snuck into the corner of the picture. It was Uncle John's way of saying he was in the picture even though he wasn't asked to be in it. 
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The end.

First time readers should start here: [link]

I'll be on hiatus while I write "The Monolith". I'll be back with the next serial fiction which will include many of my readers who were kind enough to fill out an application. I'll post the people chosen later on my Wordpress blog and on my journal sometime tomorrow.

Next: "The Monolith"
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:iconshyanne-kai:
This was fantastic. I love that you didn't shy away from the horrors of the situation, yet at the same time it was met with sensitivity and respect. It was wonderful the way you built it up. I think the most disturbing parts were how Uncle John made Ryan paint them. I look forward to reading more works by you.
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:iconlverawrites:
Thank you so much. I fixed some of the errors. I wrote this serial fiction, without help from my editor so it's nice for those little bugs to get worked out by my readers. I had plans to write an extended version and put it up on Amazon, Kinda like my first serial fiction, and most popular, "Diary of a Madman".

There's also a book on smashwords called "Burning Bridges" found free here [link] . I have a short story in there you might like. I'd love some feedback on it. :) And stay tuned here as well, my next serial fiction is due out on here later this year. It's called "The Monolith"
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:iconshyanne-kai:
Unfortunately I don't have an ebook, but I look forward to Monolith!
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:iconlverawrites:
You can donwload an ebook reader here. [link]

Yeah, I'm finally back on track with The Monolith. Wrote another chapter and a half. I'm almost at the half way point.
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:iconshyanne-kai:
Nevermind, I didn't realise you could read it online as well, I'll let you know what I think :)
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:iconshyanne-kai:
I'm kind of confused, but the idea is intriguing, and I love the imagery you conjure with this world, the electronics, and the wires.
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:icond3mo23:
~D3MO23 Feb 28, 2012  Student General Artist
Spooky~ That's a very haunting ending, and can almost call our for at least an epilogue, if not a sequel~ xD
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:iconlverawrites:
I actually wanted to re-release this story on amazon with and extended beginning and maybe a longer ending, but now i'm focusing on "The Monolith".
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~FishieGirl17 Feb 26, 2012  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Whoa! I loved the ending!
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:iconlverawrites:
thanks. I eventually want to write a longer version, with an extended beginning with more Lorena. Maybe start with her getting kidnapped somewhere.
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